Part 2.2: Improvement

APPLYING FEEDBACK

The feedback I received was mostly centered around grammatical errors, word choice, sentence structure, and the need to be more concise. Ms. Oliver pointed out areas where my sentence structure could be improved for clarity and where I could strengthen my word choices. More specifically, to increase the amount of time I spend in the editing and revision process to be able to catch these errors in my writing. However, since I only have one assignment with her feedback so far, I’m not entirely sure if these will be recurring themes in her comments. Additionally, this is one of the more recent pieces of feedback I’ve had, and I haven’t had the chance to incorporate it into any of my work yet. In the future, I plan to apply this feedback to any work I do and ensure that I avoid similar mistakes.

Feedback from my peers, on the other hand, has shown some consistent patterns. They often pointed out similar areas, especially around sentence structure and grammatical details. At the start of the semester, I frequently received comments about making my points more concise, in particular, on my In Search of Greatness activity. However, as the semester progressed, I made a conscious effort to apply this feedback on conciseness, particularly in assignments like my Personal Response #1 and Ungrading Research Paper. In both of these assignments, I focused on structuring my sentences more carefully and eliminating any unnecessary explanations. Subsequently, I was able to deliver my ideas more clearly and effectively, which I believe helped improve the overall quality of my work. However, there were still errors that appeared in my recent assignments, showing that the progress I seek will take time to develop.

Term 2 Update: From my work in the second half of the semester, I’ve seen differing perspectives on my writing pieces and ultimately, gained many other suggestions that were not talked about in the first. A major issue many found in my writing was the rough transitions between ideas and paragraphs. This was common throughout many of my research papers, personal responses, and my essay. However, since I wrote many more pieces this semester, I managed to be able to apply said feedback on stuff I have wrote.

Applying this feedback has led to noticeable improvements in my work. In Personal Response #1, I simplified my points, ensuring each sentence added value to my analysis, and in the Ungrading Research Paper, I paid close attention to sentence structure, clarity, and word choice, making my paper more readable and organized. Overall, consistent application of feedback has made my assignments feel more refined and has helped me express my ideas clearly. Seeking and using feedback was a big part of improving this semester, and it feels like the quality has improved quite a lot. I will definitely continue seeking feedback and applying it to my writing in the future.

Term 2 Update: Ultimately, I believe that I significantly improved my seeking feedback and applying it skills this term, as I have shown much more evidence compared to the previous term. I view feedback as a crucial part of my writing process, and without it, it is much more difficult to write a complete piece. I’ve seen major differences in my work this term including major improvements.